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Good effort to explain the opinion is felt.

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I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Persuasive explanation. Wording is appropriate and grammatically correct.

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I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Wording is fluent.

Some minor grammatical mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Based on the writer’s own experience.

Several grammatical mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Wording is very smooth and understandable.

Some minor grammatical mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Summary comes at the top.

Many grammatical and wording mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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The sequences of the explanation is well constructed.

Several spelling mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Many persuasive reasons. Each sentence is short and easy to understand.

Some minor wording mistakes.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Smooth wording and easy to read.

Explanation is not persuasive.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Persuasive explanation based on the writer’s own experience.

nan

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time jobirst, college students should be responsible for their behaviors not rely on parents all the time, even daily life . can earn a living by taking part-time job so that they will earning money not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, can make friends with who have the same interest. For example, if you take a job , you will meet who outgoing and also love to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of restaurant, you will meet who also interested in cooking or baking. no matter what kind of job take, they can always find who share the same interest. Last but not the least through the job, students can learn cannot learn in school uch as how to interact with costumers what to do when complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and the boss , will which abilit they lack, so they can even harder during free time orschool. three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job; first, college students should be responsible for their behaviors, not to rely on parents all the time, even on daily life spending. They can earn a living by taking part-time job, so that they will know earning money was not as easy as they thought. Once they have taken a part-time job, they will be more careful when spending money and be more responsible for their behaviors. Second, by taking a part-time job, they can make friends with who have the same interest with him. For example, if you take a job to be a seller, you will meet someone who is outgoing and also loves to interact with people; if you work in the kitchen of whatever restaurant, you will meet someone who also interested in cooking or baking. So no matter what kind of job they take, they can always find someone who shares the same interest with him. Last but not the least; through the job, students can learn something which cannot learn in school. Such as, how to interact with costumers and what to do when being complain, how to work perfectly with co-workers and also the boss, also, they will know which ability they lacking of, so they can learning even harder during free time or school. With those three reasons, I totally agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

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Very advanced grammar and vocabulary used precisely to express complex ideas very clearly.

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A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

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Poor grammar and not comprehensible. Lack of capital letters when starting sentences.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

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Tries to write more and incorporates various ideas to expand his argument.

Starts sentences using but and because. Lack of vocabulary leads him to use some inaccurate terms.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

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Good vocabulary usage such as "fulfill" and "ambition"

Grammatical errors such as missing be verbs. Opinion is not clear and fails to choose one side of argument.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

JPN

B1_2

8

6

9

8

9

9

8

7

6

4

78

74

76

Uses a range of grammatical structures correctly. Uses academic and advanced vocabulary.

Minor grammatical mistakes as well as incorrect nuances of some vocab choices.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

IDN

B1_1

2

2

1

3

2

2

3

2

6

3

17

26

21.5

Able to use some complex words in a somewhat accurate way.

Grammar structure is not accurate and various words are used incorrectly.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

ENS

ENS

9

9

8

10

9

9

8

8

6

8

90

84

87

Great colloquial expressions as well as natural phrases to create flow within the text.

Some minor grammatical mistakes. Text is very short and lacks expansion in some of the supporting sentences.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

JPN

A2_0

4

3

3

7

5

6

6

6

2

4

40

46

43

Good use of conjunctions to create flow. Easy to understand.

Text is short, and selection of verbs is wrong. Subject is not constant.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

IDN

A2_0

2

5

2

3

2

4

3

3

4

3

29

31

30

Good vocabulary. Good try to structure support sentences to lead into conclusion.

Misuse of vocabulary. Lacks grammatical structure and is difficult to understand.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

THA

B1_1

1

2

1

4

1

1

1

2

2

2

19

17

18

Good use of however and therefore when starting sentences, to create goo flow.

Subject is inconsistent and grammar structure is not present. Thus content is difficult to understand.

A part-time job for college student? Hmm f course this statement again about a part - time job we will find agreement and disagreement. How about you? s this important to you? Firstly, well verybody opinions. I think part - time job important at this moment because students could pocket money to buy all of living . this , college students could book, food, drink, with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part - time job help parent. If other students could not enough college student who will need for students? course college students. At this moment, college students a great struggle in living . Thirdly, in my opinion, a part - time job for college students because students have free time, then college students about use . Fourthly, feel a part - time job experience to college students because experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the above, only some opinion it is important for college students to have a part - time job in . Actually, no agreement about part - time job we must realize part - time job for college students.

A part-time job for college student ? Hmm.... of course this statement not strange again in your ears, if you talk about a part – time job; we will find most of agreement and disagreement. How about you ? is this important to you ? Firstly, well. Everybody have difference opinions. Perhaps, I think a part – time job for college students so very important at this moment because the workers students could pocket money by self to buy all instrument of living self. In this moment, college students could buy a book, food, drink, enjoy with special friend, and more. Secondly, I feel a part – time job help parent. If other students family could not enough needed to college student( child ) so, who is again will be completing need for college students ?, of course self college students. At this moment, college students to value a great struggle in living self. Thirdly, in my opinion, a part – time job for college students because college students to have a full free time, then college students to take function about tme use a good deal happened everything ok. Fourthly, i feel a part – time job as experience to college students because the experience is the best teacher as added knowledge for college students. For the reason above, only some opinion about it is important for college students to have a part – time job in living college students. Actually, no wrong of agreement about a part – time job, we must realize that apart – time job for college students.

KOR

B1_2

5

4

4

4

6

6

4

6

2

6

15

47

31

The writer clearly states his/her opinion.

There are many grammatical errors.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

IDN

B1_2

7

7

6

6

6

6

5

8

5

6

50

62

56

The writer has a clear opinion. He/she cites several reasons to support the opinion.

There are some grammatical errors.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

IDN

A2_0

4

4

3

6

5

3

4

3

2

3

40

37

38.5

Many supporting ideas are stated for the writer's assertion.

Not so persuasive. Seems to lack cohesion.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

KOR

B1_1

4

4

4

5

5

5

5

5

6

3

20

46

33

The writer has his/her clear opinion about the issue, and states it citing several reasons.

There are many grammatical mistakes, hence not easy to read.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

TWN

A2_0

7

7

6

6

5

6

7

7

6

3

70

60

65

Using interesting expressions like 'couch potato'.

Some grammatical mistakes are found. The last sentence is a mere repetition of the first one.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

IDN

A2_0

5

4

4

5

4

4

5

6

3

3

45

43

44

A unique idea is suggested.

There are some parts that do not make sense because of grammatically ill-structured sentences, hence difficult to understand.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

THA

B1_2

4

4

4

6

5

2

4

2

2

3

25

36

30.5

It is a good thing to mention both good and bad points.

The writer's opinion should be more clearly stated. Some sentences do not make sense.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

TWN

B2_0

7

5

7

5

8

8

6

8

6

10

70

70

70

Ideas are clear, well-organized, and easy to understand.

Some grammatical mistakes are seen.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

KOR

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The writer cites several reasons to support his/her main idea.

So many grammatical errors. The writer should clarify whether he/she agrees or disagrees in the first place.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

JPN

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The writer's opinion is clear. Citing concrete examples is also good.

There are some, though not many, grammatical errors.

In my opinion I think students part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problemsshould be hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other such as sport, music etc. if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other and students need to lighten the burden home is better to work part-time job. We should their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study at least part-time job practical experience of working with others as well. In case students have financial problems in the family part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden home and earn income families to rely on. parents not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-work experience, responsible for your work, on time and working with others as well. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not on several factors.

In my opinion. I think the students will work part time to earn extra after school is not very important. If students do not have a financial problems. They should be study hard. When they have free time, they should read books or do other activity such as sport, music etc. But if a part-time job does not interfere with the time to read books or do other activity and students need to lighten the burden of home. It is better to work part-time job. We should see that their own ability. We have enough ability to learn, coupled with a part-time job without any study or not. Because at least. A part-time job is a practical experience of working with others as well. In case of students have a financial problems in the family. A part-time job is quite important because it will lighten the burden of home and earn income families to rely on themselves. So that parents do not have to worry about our expenditures. Moreover, there is also a self-trained to work experience, responsible for your work, trained themselves on time and working with others as well too. Therefore, a part-time job is important or not. It depends on several factors as well.

IDN

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the writer tried to use his personal life experience which was good

few grammatical mistakes were noticed and need to improve on his choices of words

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

KOR

A2_0

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54

essay was decodable and could understand the points in the essay

there were few grammar errors and overuse of words were found as well

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

CHN

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the best part of the essay was it so well organized and almost total error free

maybe next time try to give a better finishing touch in the conclusion part of essay

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

IDN

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the writer seems very confident throughout her essay and her idea seems nice also

maybe next time do more practice on grammar and some unnecessary use of coma also

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

THA

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straight to the point and clear about it.

grammatical mistakes were observed. only used simple words.

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

TWN

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50

very good use of grammar and the essay was well organized

there were few grammar and vocabular mistakes were found . Maybe needs practice o that part

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

JPN

B1_2

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80

essay was very nice decorated and well organized until the end.

not many grammar mistakes were found and spelling error

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

HKG

B2_0

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45

structure of the essay was nice and it was decodable properly

there were many grammar mistakes and the writer only wrote about from a single point of view

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

PHL

B2_0

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3

21

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21

essay had a very good starting point and good use of vocabulary

it seems in the middle part of the essay writer went off the track from main content

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

CHN

A2_0

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22

essay was understandable and idea of the writer was good

there were many grammar mistakes and most of the sentence was not related to the content

Society challenges for college students it is important for us to have experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking part-time job or even more than one. It quite common to see students busy after classes why is it important for to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to . College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our , so time is playing computer games or doing other boring things. If part-time job, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show . Second, part-time jobs can help us more people. Colleges have students and teachers society has different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could good interpersonal relationship. After you graduate, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can it to you. Finally, is the most important The key point is you can get theexperience book teach you. Practice is way check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do , no one will believe you. You have to study what should do part-time jobs would let you those. college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

Society has more and more challenges for college students. So it is important for us to have much experience. In our country there are plenty of college students undertaking a part-time job or even more than one part-time job. It's quite common to see students to be busy after classes. But why is it important for us to get these? First, I think part-time jobs are a good way to count our thumbs. College isn't as busy as high school. When we finish our study, so much time is waste for playing computer games or doing other boring things. If a part-time job belongs to us, we will try our best to do it. After all, that's a way to show the ability we have. Second, part-time jobs can help us knowing more people. Colleges just have students and teachers. But society has quite different people. They do all kinds of work, and experience interesting things you have never heard. Through your part-time job you could get good interpersonal relationship. After you graduated, you will go to society. When you need help, these people can give it to you. Finally, it is the most important one. The key point is you can get the experience the book can't teach you. Practice is the way which could check the truth. If you only can talk about how to do it, no one will believe you. You have to study what should you do. And part-time jobs would let you knowing those. So college students' having a part-time job is necessary and important.

CHN

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The writer's opinion is clear. He/She tries to appeal to the readers.

Subjects of the sentences are inconsistent. As he/she writes "our college students," he/she sounds like a teacher rather than a student.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

HKG

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Ideas are consistent. A variety of sentence structures are observed.

Some grammatical and lexical mistakes are observed. Undergraduates are not always teenagers.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

KOR

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25.5

The writer uses ordinal numerals properly.

The subjects of the sentences are inconsistent. Mistakes of the verb tenses and punctuation problems are observed.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

CHN

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Thanks to the compact sentence structures, it is easy to understand what the writer means.

The writer shows other people's opinions more than his/her own, and as a result, the writer's main point is not well-developed.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

KOR

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48

Some advantages of the part-time jobs and supporting details are presented.

The last sentence begins with "But," which weakens the paragraph.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

JPN

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The structure of the paragraph follows the basic style of the opinion paragraph. Good ideas and supporting details are observed.

We, you and they are used as the subjects of the sentences. Some sentences start with "And" and "But."

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

PHL

B2_0

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59

Some good ideas and supporting details are observed.

Some run-on sentences are observed. Subjects of the sentences are inconsistent.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

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The writer describes his/her personal experience in detail.

Because of the grammatical errors, many parts are incomprehensible.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

TWN

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Good ideas and supporting details are presented. Complex sentence structures are well handled.

The way of presenting the main idea is redundant. Both "They" and "You" are used as the subjects of the sentences.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

THA

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59.5

Well-constructed paragraph, good ideas and supporting details are presented.

Some grammatical errors and the misuse of words are observed.

I think that it is important for college students to have part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things are very important but not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they may be doing, it is need to cooperate with others to work. Through kind of cooperation, can learn what is important to relations with colleagues or bosses. In my case, I English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching students, I realized importan mutual communicat with people. Another example is that can a respect recognition money. Through working hard and then money as a salary, realize that money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work part time, I thought money something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

I think that it is important for college students to have a part time job. The reason is that they can learn a lot of things which are very important but which are not taught in schools. For example, they can learn how to build a good relationship between colleagues or a boss. Whatever part time they you may be doing, it is usual that you need to cooperate with others to work. Through these kinds of cooperation, they can learn what is important to make relations with colleagues or bosses better. In my case, I am English for high school students in a cram school as a part time job. Through the experience of cooperating with other teachers and teaching for students, I realized how important it is to mutually communicate with people. Another example is that they can grow a respectable recognition towards money. Through working hard and then getting money as a salary, they realize that getting money require hard work and how important money is. This also applies to me. Before I started to work as a part time, I thought that money is something that is given by my parents for free but now I think that money need labor and time. In conclusion, a part time job can teach many important things to students. Therefore, college students should have a part time job.

TWN

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55.5

The reasons were explained logically in the essay.

Some grammatical errors were quite obvious in the essay.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

THA

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2

17

16

16.5

The readers could understand what the author was trying to say.

The author could not express the ideas and opinions accurately.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

JPN

B2_0

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50.5

The writer's writing purpose was very clear in the essay.

Many grammatical mistakes; not very logical and persuasive.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

CHN

B1_2

9

7

8

7

8

7

8

8

6

7

79

75

77

The author did use rhetorical questions to lure the readers to read on.

There were still some minor problems in expression.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

THA

B1_1

4

2

3

2

3

2

3

4

4

1

35

28

31.5

It was not hard to understand what the author intended to express in the essay.

Apparently, the author didn't have a good command of some basic grammatical rules.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

JPN

A2_0

6

5

5

4

3

3

5

6

2

5

55

44

49.5

The author did give us some supporting details to state his or her opinions.

Some grammatical mistakes could be easily found in the essay.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

HKG

B2_0

7

7

7

6

6

6

4

3

6

6

60

58

59

The author did cite some examples to prove what he or she thought.

Some expressions were not that correct and coherent.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

ENS

ENS

8

7

6

6

5

4

5

3

8

5

68

57

62.5

The writer could state his or her opinions very clearly.

A few ungrammatical expressions; some sentences were informal.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

CHN

B1_2

7

6

6

6

5

6

5

6

6

6

65

59

62

The author used questions to arouse the readers' interest.

Some expressions and collocations were not proper.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

KOR

B2_0

3

2

1

1

1

1

3

4

4

2

23

22

22.5

The writer did explain those reasons in a very logical way.

Some words were misused; not very convincing.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered. I believe that this has to take into account the idea ofopportunity cost. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue investment of time. Students who parttime job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose instead invest his or her time on instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By comparison, spending more time on studies thus better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better . In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

I disagree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job. While it is true that college tuition fees are high these days, there have also been scholarships and loans being offered too. I believe that this has to take into account the idea of'opportunity cost'. Take for example the case of a student who is deciding whether or not to work to support his studies or to spend more time studying to obtain a better result. The student has the option of working harder and spending more time to study to obtain scholarship for his studies. The scholarship could solve the student's financial problems in addition to getting excellent results. I believe that this is an issue of investment of time. Students who do part time job are generally tired when they attend classes. This could affect their studies indirectly. A person could choose to instead invest his or her time on studies instead while applying for a loan to support the tuition fees. Being able to pay the tuition fees by working part time and being tired or sleepy in classes is not a good option. By doing the comparison, spending more time on studies thus getting better results and obtaining a scholarship is a better one. In conclusion, the statement that it is important for college students to have a part time job should be discarded as it is not a viable alternative of solving a person's financial constraint problems. It is not wise for a student to forgo his studies to support his or her school tuition fees.

CHN

B1_1

6

7

6

7

6

7

7

7

7

7

67

67

67

good reasonings; arguments are supported using real life examples; try to engage readers

many inaccuracies on verb forms; some errors on the use of articles and prepositions

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

TWN

B1_1

4

4

3

4

4

5

4

4

4

5

41

41

41

committed to complete the task; good choice of arguments; some complex sentences are correctly written

some sentences have no verb; missing articles and incorrect inflections are observed

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

SIN

B2_0

4

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

39

39

39

length of the text is good;

some forms are incorrectly used (e.g. interested instead of interesting); positioning is not clearly shown in the middle part

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

JPN

B1_1

6

6

5

6

6

6

5

6

6

6

58

58

58

clear preference given at the beginning of the text; organization of ideas is stated explicitly; good reasonings

text is relatively short; some odd collocations are observed; some problems on quantifiers and articles

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

HKG

B2_0

7

7

6

7

8

7

8

8

8

8

74

74

74

clear subjects and verbs in the sentences; sentences are coherent; good reasonings are provided

while not heavily affecting the delivery, some sentences are wordy; engagement with readers can still be improved

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

JPN

A2_0

5

5

4

5

6

6

5

6

6

6

54

54

54

numerous arguments are offered by the author; texts are generally comprehensible

some arguments are not clearly supported; article usage needs attention

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

IDN

B1_2

4

4

3

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

38

38

38

the organization of ideas is explicitly presented in the beginning; some arguments are elaborated

some elementary spelling errors are detected; closing statement is not very clear; grammatical agreements need attention

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

TWN

A2_0

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

20

20

20

frequent use of sophisticated words; preference declared early at the beginning of the text

many sentences are incomplete without clear subject and verb; semantically, some sentences make no sense

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

TWN

B2_0

6

6

5

6

6

6

6

6

6

6

59

59

59

good use of signal words; use real-life examples; in general, the text is comprehensible

incorrect preposition uses are observed; redundancy is observed on some segments; overelaboration needs to be reduced

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

JPN

A2_0

4

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

4

2

37

37

37

explicit preference stated at the beginning and the end of the text; structure of arguments are presented early

subject - verb agreement errors are observed; not many complex vocabularies; errors heavily disturb text coherence

arttime job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowance. Having a parttime job also has its pros and cons but based on the person taking . Maybe for it's difficult other people enjoy every minute of . People will never be what they seem; will always surprise you what they can really do in life. When you have a parttime job, you earn extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud yourself. getting a parttime job depends on whether you are busy with school projects of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowance or for money but will always come first for college students with part time jobs.

Part time job is one of the skills every college students needs before getting a job. It is like a training for every college student who is about to embark on their future careers. It is also a source of income for those independent students, for those who pay for their tuition or for those who want to have extra allowances. Having a part time job also has its pros and cons but it is still based on the person taking it. Maybe, for him it's difficult but for other people they enjoy every minute of it. People will never be what they seem; it will always surprise you on what they can really do in life. When you have a part time job, you earn extra money and extra money. When you have extra money no one will stop you in buying whatever you want. Whether it's a Christian Dior dress or a Louis Vuitton bag, no one's stopping you in buying those things since the money is yours and you have the right to spend it on anything you want. People may think you're a spender but when you earn something by yourself and buy the things you want, you feel ecstatic, excited, happy and proud for yourself. But getting a part time job depends on whether you are busy with school projects or not, of course, studies are our first priority when it comes to school. It teaches us how to prioritize our time management because we do part time jobs for additional allowances or for money but study will always comes first for every college students around the world with part time jobs.

CHN

B1_1

8

7

6

6

8

7

5

6

8

8

60

69

64.5

The essay shows a high degree of willingness to finish the task. The logic is clear.

There are occasionally some basic mistakes in grammar. Also, the ending part is redundant.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

JPN

B2_0

5

4

4

4

5

4

2

2

3

3

30

36

33

The structure is clear with proper use of discourse markers. Ideas are generally understandable.

The ideas are too shallow. Some examples are not pertinent to the topic. Some sentences are redundant.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

HKG

B2_0

6

6

7

4

8

6

6

7

6

6

58

62

60

A variety of sentence patterns can be observed, improving the readability of the essay. Also, the essay features high accuracy.

The fluency of the essay can be further improved with proper use of discourse markers.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

PHL

B2_0

9

10

7

7

7

7

8

7

10

1

83

73

78

Very accurate selection of words and phrases. Strong and persuasive evidence is provided.

The beginning part is a little bit redundant. Not very pertinent in general.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

IDN

B2_0

6

8

6

8

8

8

9

6

8

7

77

74

75.5

The writer shows a high degree of sophistication. Few mistakes in language can be found.

The writer focuses too much on the relation between money and part-time jobs. Maybe more aspects can be considered.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

SIN

B2_0

6

8

8

9

7

7

8

6

6

5

82

70

76

Impressive command of grammar. The writer also shows a high level of sophistication with original perspectives.

Maybe more efforts can be made to improve the overall involvement of the essay.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

THA

B1_2

3

4

3

5

4

5

6

4

3

3

32

40

36

Different factors are considered. Some ideas are original and showing a certain degree of sophistication.

Not showing enough purposeless to finish the task. Some sentences are very redundant and do not contain useful information.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

IDN

B1_2

7

7

6

5

6

2

4

2

6

1

43

46

44.5

Different aspects are considered. Occasionally there are memorable expressions.

The essay features low involvement. Also, sentences are not logically connected.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

THA

A2_0

3

4

2

1

3

2

2

1

2

1

17

21

19

Occasionally there are memorable expressions. Real-life examples are used.

Sentences are scattered and not logically connected. Also, there are too many basic mistakes. Not very readable.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

KOR

B1_1

8

7

8

8

9

8

8

9

8

5

80

78

79

Adequate explanations and special perspectives. Few mistakes in vocabulary and grammar.

sentence structures are too simple and lack variation.

, there are so many niversity students who not only go to campus, listen their teachers , do their tasks, and study, but also parttime job. University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their . taking parttime job they hope they can salary to fulfill their niversity needs, for example, copies their paper, their homework, book to support their reports, study tour program to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough from their parttime job, honest, they want experiences, challenges, friends, networking and they want to enjoy their young before they world job. University students who part time job be wise to set their time between their dut as University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they to parttime job, already about the positive and negative sides. They also should have permission from their parents when they are taking parttime job. friend she as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good time management. She enjoys her work, because of that, she into an independent woman. means that a part time job sometime good effect.

Nowadays, there are so many University students who not only go to their campus, listen their teacher's explanation, do their tasks, and study, but also taking a part time job. The University students do this to fill their spare time after they finished their study at their University. With taking a part time job they hope they can get salary to fulfill their University needs, for example, copies their paper, searching their homework with go to the Internet center, buy some books to support their reports, join study tour which is a programme from their University to make a thesis, etc. Besides, they get good enough salary from their taking a part time job, to honest, they want to have experiences, challenges, friends, net-working and the last they want to enjoy their young life before they really come into world job. University students who taking a part time job should be wise to set their time between their duty as a University student and their part time job. Actually, it is not easy, but when they take decision to taking a part time job, they already though hardly about the positive sides and the negative sides. They also should have the permission from their parents when they are taking a part time job. Like my friend, she work as private teacher. She works in her spare time. She is good in time management. She enjoys her works, because of that, she turn into an independent woman. It means that a part time job sometime can cause a good effect.

TWN

A2_0

3

5

4

3

4

5

4

5

4

4

40

41

40.5

No strong points in particular.

Made a lot of grammatical mistakes. Argument contained a lot of empty phrases and repeated arguments.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

IDN

B1_1

4

3

3

3

3

4

3

4

4

3

33

34

33.5

No strong points in particular

Loads of grammatical mistakes. Very poor use of punctuations. Repetition of some arguments.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

JPN

B1_1

8

7

6

6

8

7

7

7

7

7

72

70

71

Willingness to present arguments that support their point of view. No vocabulary mistakes

Made a number of grammatical mistakes. A number of empty phrases and repeated arguments.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

IDN

B1_1

1

1

1

1

2

2

1

2

2

2

13

15

14

No strong points what so ever.

Intelligibility of essay was so poor it lead to poor comprehensibility of argument. So many grammatical mistakes. It gave me a headache trying to decipher the content of the essay.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

ENS

ENS

8

9

8

9

7

9

9

9

9

9

87

86

86.5

Strong argument point. Fair utilization of complex grammatical structures and vocabulary.

No weak points in particular, just some minor inaccurate utilizations of some phrases.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

CHN

B1_1

8

8

6

8

8

8

8

8

9

9

81

80

80.5

Strong logic and minimum grammatical mistakes. Good use of punctuations.

No gross weak points apart from a couple of grammatical mistakes

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

KOR

A2_0

1

1

0

2

1

3

1

3

2

2

13

16

14.5

no strong points in particular.

A lot of grammatical mistakes. Comprehensibility of argument was so poor. Poor use of punctuation.

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

THA

A2_0

0

0

0

0

0

0

0

0

1

1

4

2

3

No strong points what so ever.

Thar essay is basically incomprehensible. Loads and loads of errors

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

IDN

B1_2

6

6

5

5

6

6

6

6

7

7

61

60

60.5

Argument was generally comprehensible. Gave a lot of points to support their position

A lot of repetition in the essay. A number of grammatical and vocabulary errors

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

TWN

B2_0

8

7

6

8

7

6

7

6

8

8

73

71

72

Very well use of punctuation. Minimum vocabulary errors.

No weak points in particular, a part from some grammatical mistakes and some logical unclear points

I agree with ecause they need training before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If don't study hard is a personal problem. if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. if they have part-time job they a to learn or example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, solv , and so on. they will quickly get used to working when they have full-time job they have experience. working in college days is not the only . Of course need to study and read they don't study their college fee no use. However students tend to their time to work for money . They need social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate college life is time for many students. it is important for college students to have parttime job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

I agree with it. Because they need a training to work before graduate. Studying in college is very different from working in society. If they don't study hard that is a personal problem. But if employees don't work hard that is not a personal problem. And if they have a part-time job they can get a lot to learn. For example responsibility, hospitability, communication skills, how to solve problems, and so on. And they will quickly get used to working when they have a full-time job as they have experiences to work. But working in college days is not the only thing to do. Of course they need to study and reading. If they don't study their college fee is no use. However a lot of students tend to take their time to work for money that they can use for what they want. They need a social training but they have to understand what is important to do now. They can work as much as they want after graduate. But college life is only one time for many students. So it is important for college students to have a part time job, and it is also important for them to study. Balance is a key to success their college days.

THA

B1_2

6

7

6

4

7

6

6

5

7

4

61

58

59.5

Organized well with overall solid use of authentic vocabulary. Ideas are complex and well supported.

Some sentence intent is understandable, but the phrases are incorrect. Some short/fragment sentences.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

SIN

B2_0

10

9

10

10

10

10

10

8

9

9

96

95

95.5

Complex vocabulary and diverse grammar build a very strong argumentative piece.

A few instances of uncommon phrases or vocabulary throughout, but not distracting.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

JPN

B1_2

6

4

5

6

5

6

6

6

4

4

63

52

57.5

Sentence structure is clear and concise, with minimal errors. Vocabulary is overall accurate and appropriate.

Conclusion is not clearly linked to the points made in text. "theirs" repeatedly used in err.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

THA

A2_0

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2

1

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2

1

2

2

2

12

16

14

Length is appropriate, with necessary points and supporting evidence attempted to be provided with personal connection evident.

Sentences often incomprehensible because of incorrect vocab and grammar. Some too long; run on.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

THA

B1_1

4

4

4

4

6

5

4

6

7

4

46

48

47

Writer structures response well. Despite vocab/grammar issues, the writers position is clear.

Vocabular and grammar errors throughout. Phrases often incorrect (we doesn’t know employer - we have never been an employee)

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

ENS

ENS

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9

6

9

8

85

81

83

Uses anecdotal stories and comparisons well. Sentences structurally complex and clear.

Few errors present. A few grammatical errors but not distracting from reading.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

KOR

A2_0

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3

32

31

31.5

Comparing old and young students was powerful. Sentences often too short but written in proper grammatical style.

Uses extreme example to defend position, not aware of more realistic examples. Sentences often too short or vague to help create meaning.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

CHN

B1_1

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5

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9

8

93

77

85

Authentic phrases and accurate vocabulary used to create clear passage. Advanced use of comparisons to food.

A few instances of overused ("taught to ESL students but not authentic English") phrases throughout.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

IDN

B1_2

4

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4

4

4

4

4

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4

52

37

44.5

Sentence structure often complex and accurate, making passage more vivid. Vocabulary choices often advanced and correct.

some inauthentic phrases (commute burden), errors in word form (balancing in stead of balance).

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.

TWN

A2_0

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8

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8

83

74

78.5

Integrated casual/common idioms correctly and applied reasons in to both present (make money) and future (job).

Some sentences are not coherent and therefore confusing.

As we know, college student are their task in college what , almost from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich they from a poor family. Some of their profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is their . They need money their . , there is a kind reason or we say reason for this statement some people parttime job and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students parttime job to their living and college administration. we found some college students search experience their future and live, and only fill in their free time or for having fun. , in my opinion have parttime job. Beside they can help their parent, they can learn how to manage time and of course their financial now on.

As we know, college student are doing their task in a college what we call it study, almost from them come from outside city. Perhaps they are not coming from rich family they came from a poor family. Some of their parent has profession as a farmer, teacher, fisherman and etc. In fact, is not their obligation to look for money, but this is a kind of demand for their life. They need money for their life. So, there is a kind reason or we can say so much reason for this statement, some people has a part time job is an obligation and some people are not. Sometimes, we found college students has a part time job to complete their needed such as living cost and college administration. And we also found some college students do it for search an experience for their future and better live, and only for fill in their free time or just for having fun. So, in my opinion have a part time job for college students is important. Beside they can help their parent, they can also learn how to manage a time and of course their financial in their life now on.