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JPN

A2_0

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49.5

The writer attempted to complete the task with the use of exemplification.

The writer could enhance punctuations and grammar accuracy (e.g., pronouns and subject-verb agreement).

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

TWN

A2_0

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62

61.5

Although the work has flaws in terms of linguistic conventions, the essay is rich in content (data and examples).

The essay needs to be enhanced in the areas of spelling, subject-verb agreement, and word choice.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

TWN

B1_2

4

5

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5

4

4

5

7

7

7

52

51

51.5

The content is rich with lessons to learn on the par of the reader. The writer used rhetoric in his or her work.

Word choice could be enhanced and run-on sentences need to be avoided.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

IDN

A2_0

7

6

6

6

7

7

7

6

6

6

64

64

64

The writer's grammar and semantic usage are emerging.

The work is lacking in terms of grammar and punctuations.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

PAK

B1_2

6

5

7

7.5

5

5

5

0

0

8

43

48.5

45.75

The writer attempted to provide a religious perspective on the topic and did not merely focus on economical reasons.

The writer did not really explain why it is important to have a part-time job, hence missing the purpose of the task.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

IDN

B1_2

6

6

4

6

6

6

6

6

6

6

58

58

58

The writer is good in incorporating inductive and deductive reasoning.

The work needs improvement in the areas of punctuations and subject-verb agreement.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

JPN

B2_0

4

3

5

3.5

3

2.5

2.5

4

4

4

33

35.5

34.25

The writer was able to enumerate various benefits of having a part-time job.

The essay needs improvement in the area of grammar and organization.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

KOR

B2_0

5

4.5

4

4

4

5

5

5

5

4

45.5

45.5

45.5

The writer completed the task with the use of subordination.

The areas which need most improvement are organization and spelling.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

CHN

B1_1

3

3

3

3

4

4

4

6

6

6

42

42

42

The writer attempted to present ideas using a deductive approach.

The weakest domains of the work are the use of fragments and subject-verb agreement.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

KOR

B1_2

1

1

3

3

1

1

1

3.5

3.5

3

17

21

19

Even though the work had many grammar errors, the writer attempted to use semantically complex vocabulary.

The work could improve in terms of capitalization, use of tenses (e.g., simple and progressive) and prepositions.

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job some other people don't think it is good. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job reasons people agree. Firstly, if have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste time and affect their studying. , just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned students should have a part-time job on . For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed as much knowledge as possible. For another, without , some work that do waste our . we learn less it make working ineffective because the job we should. All in all, it is necessary have a part-time job and .

Recently, there has been a discussion about whether it is important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two opinions about this question. Some people think it is good to have part-time job. But some other people don't think it is good to do it. I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have some reasons. Some people are agree with this sentence. Firstly, if they have a part-time job, they can relieve their parents' burden. Besides, it also can increase their chances to practice in society. However, some people object this opinion. They claim that part-time jobs will waste student's time and affect their studying. Therefore, they just need to work hard. As far as I am concerned that students should have a part-time job on the basis of working selectively. For one thing, by working they can keep themselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, some working that everyone can do will waste our times. And we will learn less. Also it will make working ineffective because of we don't do the job which we should do. All in all, it is necessary that we should have a part-time job and have some selection.

IDN

B1_1

4

3

4

3

5

4

4

5

8

4

44

44

44

Central idea and clarity of purpose are generally evident throughout the essay. Uses and manipulates subject specific

Essay has few spelling, punctuation, and grammatical errors allowing reader to follow ideas with few fragments or run-ons.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

IDN

B1_1

5

7

4

3

4

3

4

5

3

3

41

41

41

The intention of the author's writing is quite straightforward, and there is some evidence of audience interest.

The writer makes several errors in grammar, mechanics, and/or spelling that interfere with understanding.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

THA

B1_1

3

5

2

3

3

2

3

3

2

3

29

29

29

There is one clear, well- focused topic. Good overall organization, includes the main organizational tools and shows awareness of purpose.

The writer has ideas to describe the topic, but he/she expresses the ideas in opposite way of the task given and errors of sentence organization.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

HKG

B2_0

6

9

9

10

8

10

9

9

8

9

87

87

87

Informative intro, grabs attention, general to specific thesis ; Clear, concise arguable thesis, strong verb.

The author makes a few errors in grammar, mechanics, and/or spelling, but they do not interfere with understanding.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

KOR

A2_0

2

4

2

3

3

4

3

2

3

3

29

29

29

Great, the writer is able to express the logical reasons to develops ideas with sufficient and firm evidence.

The writer is not on the right task of writing to support and distraction is created by spelling, punctuation, and grammatical errors; there are frequent errors.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

KOR

B1_1

5

6

4

5

6

5

4

4

3

2

44

44

44

Main points are present with limited detail and development. Some critical thinking is present.

Writing style may be inappropriate for the reader; in some parts of the essay, the reader can lose interest.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

CHN

B1_1

9

10

8

9

9

10

8

9

10

5

87

87

87

Completely addresses the prompt or problem and is supported by relevant, precise and adequate evidence from suitable sources.

There is a sense of structure, but there is little or no use of any of the organizational resources.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

IDN

B1_2

5

4

4

3

4

4

4

4

3

6

41

41

41

Approaches the use of such ranges at the college level of sentence patterns, diction, and rhetorical devices.

Providing the ideas some points seem not agree with taking a part-time job which it is unclear to the reader. It is not really convincing to the reader.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

IDN

B1_1

8

5

3

3

6

9

6

7

7

4

58

58

58

Content indicates original thinking and develops ideas with sufficient and firm evidence.

Distraction is caused by spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors, making reading difficult; fragments, comma splices, run-ons obvious. Errors occur regularly.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

ENS

ENS

4

3

2

3

2

2

3

2

2

4

27

27

27

Controlled and varied sentence development. Good, the writing style is fluent, clear and the tone is appropriate.

For this general subject, the material use is important, but do not make clear how it is relevant to this particular question/title.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because has many advantages for the students. will make students become independent people students will income to pay their living from will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money . Moreover, the students will be because they can manage time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. the parttime job, the workers may not be late to . , it forces the studentsas workersto be on time . Not only that, can develop skill when they are . So, after lesson the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, can use their time well they can avoid wasting time such playing, shopping, and many others. their time for useful activity. , having a part time job is very useful and important all students in college should their time having a part time job.

It is important for college students to have a part time job because it has many advantages for the students. It will make the students become an independent people. The students will get income to pay their living cost from salary of their job. They will not bother their parents and spend their parents' money so much. Moreover, the students will be discipline because they can manage the time well, they know the time when they have to study and when they have to work. In the part time job, the workers may not be late to come to their job. So, it forces the students as the workers to be on time in their job. Not only that, it also can develope the student's knowlegde skill. The students can develope their knowlegde when they are having a part time job. So, after getting lesson from the college, the students directly can apply it in their job. Furthermore, the studebts can use their time well, they can avoid from wasting the time, such as playing, shopping, and many others. And their time just for useful activity. So, having a part time job for the college students is very useful and important. And all the students in the college should provide their time for having a part time job.

IDN

A2_0

6

4

4

5

4

5

5

3

4

4

43

44

43.5

Most of the sentences in the essay make sense on their own.

The writer's position is not clear in the essay. He/she discusses the topic without clearly stating what the opinion is.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

CHN

B1_2

4

4

3

4

4

2

3

2

3

2

35

31

33

There's an attempt to use complex sentence structures. Good explanation and expansion of ideas are also present in some parts of the essay.

Several sentences contradict the writer's opinion. The arrangement and inclusion of some supporting sentences are illogical.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

TWN

B1_2

8

6

6

8

7

6

6

7

8

6

75

68

71.5

The writer is mindful about the purpose of the task and presented reasons why college students should have part-time jobs.

The essay started well but some of the supporting details in the second half of the essay are not relevant to the main idea.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

TWN

A2_0

1

1

1

2

1

1

1

1

1

1

12

11

11.5

The opinion is stated clearly at the start of the essay, and some ideas are connected to the opinion.

There are many sentences that are too difficult to understand. It seems that the words are just stitched together but not in the correct order.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

KOR

B1_2

4

3

3

3

4

3

3

4

4

4

46

35

40.5

Some of the examples given support the opinion of the writer.

Most expressions used are unclear and awkward. Most ideas are also not explained.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

KOR

A2_0

2

1

1

2

2

2

2

1

2

2

14

17

15.5

Basic transition words such as "first," "second," etc. are used in the essay. Main opinion is clearly stated.

There are many irrelevant sentences that do not support the main idea.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

JPN

B1_2

8

7

8

8

7

6

7

7

8

7

74

73

73.5

The first half of the essay is clear, well-supported, and well-explained.

The second half of the essay is rife with unrelated sentences that do not explain nor provide examples about the topic.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

PHL

B2_0

8

8

8

8

7

8

7

7

7

7

75

75

75

The writer's opinion is clearly stated. The sentences are also clear.

Specific examples could have been provided to further expand the discussion of the writer's opinion.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

JPN

A2_0

8

8

7

8

8

8

7

8

7

7

77

76

76.5

The rest of the sentences are logically connected to the conclusion of the essay.

Some ideas are vague, and they could have been explained further.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

CHN

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79.5

The writer seems comfortable with the language. Explanation of ideas was done with ease and fluency.

Some supporting ideas are unnecessary and not related to the main idea.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working in school. More working might help have more than to get the job want after leaving school. This means may more competitive capacity others. you can learn how to get along with people and understand the difficulty of earning money. It make you more mature. the other , as we may spend almost whole rest of our seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students they working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are problems, I don't think the part-time job cost is worth. Moreover, for those who cannot their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step your business life, or you may regret it.

I think it is good but necessary for college students to have a part-time job. It is good to have some working experiments in school. More working experiments might help you have more chance than the other to get the job you want after you leaving school. This means, it may bring you more competitive capacity than others. And you can also learn how to get along with people, and understand the difficulty of earning money. It may make you more mature. But in the other way, as we may spend almost whole the rest of our life to seek and work hard for money, I don't think it is necessary for us to start it in our school life. People always want to be adults in their childhood; and want to be students when they started working. There are many things we can do only in school. Unless there are economy problems, I don't think the time the part-time job cost is worthy. Moreover, for those who cannot arrange their time well, it is possible to spend too much time and energy on the part-time job, which cause they overpass their school grades. Thus, if there are no reasons, enjoy your college life. Don't be too eager to step in your business life, or you may regret with it.

KOR

A2_0

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37

Ideas were straight to the point and good use of words and connection with readers was established

Grammar needs improvements as well as connection to the readers were missing

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

JPN

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The writer's ideas were laid correctly along with strong ideas and thoughts.

Grammar can be improved along with sequencing of ideas and thoughts.

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

IDN

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53

47

The writer used strong points to strengthen his/ her stand, good communication with the reader

Use of words/ vocabulary can be improved same as with lack of ideas and explanation

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

TWN

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Present logically reasonable idea and argument. ended with concluding sentence.

Use of pronouns and choice of words/ vocabulary can be improved, Use of proper punctuation can be improved

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

JPN

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4

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41.5

Great debate ideas to insert in the essay, good choice of words

Use of proper punctuation, inadequate vocabulary knowledge. Grammar can be improved

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

TWN

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The writer was able to present a logically reasonable idea.

Grammars and choice of may be improved. Writer exhibited lack of willingness to communicate.

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

KOR

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34.5

Examples and supporting details were used to support his claim. Strong point were presented

Lack of morphological and semantical words. Grammar may be improved

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

KOR

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35

Good communication with the reader and gave reasonable ideas and thoughts

Needs more confidence in writing and lack of connection with the reader

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

PHL

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45.5

The ideas were presented good, good use of words and shows attention to work

Use of proper punctuation can be improved as well as lack of willingness to communicate with the reader

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

KOR

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The ideas are well-sophisticated. The reasons and conclusions are logically connected

Use of proper punctuation. Involvement of the reader may be improved

time job is very important for college students statement based on my own reason. First, a parttime job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our parttime job could reduce our family's financial even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit sometimes the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily . Earning money by ourselves be a very helpful thing we burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we , so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our fulltime . It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle problems by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have experience for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and to find a new job, our chance accepted is higher than who never a job at all. I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

Part time job is very important for college students. The statement was made based on my own reason. First, have a part time job will be useful for us one day in the future. We could learn how to earn our own money, how to manage our income, and many other things so the time we have will not be wasted. Moreover, if we are from another island, our part time job could reduce our family's financial problem even if it's just a little. Second, we must admit, sometimes, the money that is transferred monthly by our parents is not enough for our daily need. Earning money by ourselves will be a very helpful thing so we won't burden our parents by asking more money. They also can't complain about how we are going to use it because it's the money that we earn, so we have the right to manage it by ourselves. Last but not least, part time job helps us to be independent. It gives us experience to handle the problems we will face in our full time job in the future. It also helps us to learn how to socialize with our co-workers, how to be close with them, or how to handle the problems those occurred by them. It's also easier to find a job if we have the experience to work for the other people. For example, if we ever had a job and want to find a new job, our chance to be accepted is higher than the ones who never have a job at all. So I conclude that having a part time job is very important for college students.

CHN

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30.5

Reasons were logical and were presented coherently. The flow of the idea are organized.

Evidences to support your claim are too general. There are few punctuation and grammar errors.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

TWN

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Powerful and original claim. Experience based points and arguments.

Sentence construction were incomplete and disorganized. Arguments are quite messy.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

CHN

B2_0

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Excellent use of transitional words. Demonstrated willingness and purposefulness in explaining own opinion.

Failed to express thoughts in complete sentence. Also failed to provide a more complex reasoning.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

THA

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Demonstrated willingness to engage in the task. Tried to express thoughts clearly.

Most of the sentences are hardly comprehensible. There are many grammar and vocabulary errors.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

TWN

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Exceptional vocabulary and sentence construction.

There are minimal vocabulary, grammar, and punctuation errors.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

IDN

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74.5

Thoughts and ideas are complete and concise. Almost no grammar and vocabulary errors.

Some punctuations are incorrect. Failed to provide a more complex reasoning.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

CHN

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Used some complex phrases/construction. Great use of signal words.

Given the fluency, should have elaborated or added some points or arguments.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

JPN

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Provided a factual and concrete examples to support the argument.

Failed to express thoughts in complete sentence.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

KOR

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Flow of the arguments are organized with the help of signal words.

There were very minimal punctuation and grammar errors.

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

IDN

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Presented thoughts in complete sentences. Demonstrated high fluency by elucidating further his points.

Very minor accuracy issues (grammar).

All students at university must a lot of money because life at university different from high school. many new things to pay such as books for in learning. we should have part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also buy , for with friends and for . If all students part-time job very because we have money and part-time job help us manage time waste time at dormitory online and sleep in bed. If we hav part-time job at university I think it help us future career because we manage time and service. Part-time job very important for all students but damage us if we cannot manage time for and job. if we want to have parttime job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job fail both. I don't disagree a part-time job but students should know what is or necessary.

All of students at university must use a lot of money because life at university has different from high school. It has many new things to pay such as we must pay a lot of books for use in learning. Then we should have a part-time job because students like us must pay a lot of money not only buy books but also we use money for buy cloths, for travel with friends and for use at the entertain things. If all of students have part-time job is very interested because we can have money by myself and part-time job can help us for manage time don't waste time at dormitory in play game online or chat online and sleep in the bed. If we have part-time job at university I think it can help us for future career because we can manage time and service. Part-time job is very important for all of students but it can damage us if we cannot manage time for study and job. Then if we want to have part0time job we should make sure that we can manage time for study and for job don't fail of both. I don't disagree to have a part-time job but students should know what is benefit or necessary for them to do.

JPN

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22.5

Examples and supporting details were used to support his claim. Almost grammatically correct.

unfocused topic sentences to support their claims. focused on the subject so broad that he/she cannot address the main topic.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

PAK

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Examples and supporting details were used to support his claim. Almost grammatically correct.

Inadequate conclusion, uses extraneous words in some sentences. overused of prepositions in some sentences.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

JPN

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44.5

The writer was able to relate examples and supporting details were used to support his/her claims.

focused on the subject so broad that he/she cannot address the main topic.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

THA

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75.5

The writer was able to develop his ideas using logical reasoning. Adequate Conclusion

uses extraneous words in some sentences. overused of prepositions in some sentences. Grammar may be improved.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

KOR

B2_0

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52.5

The writer was able to relate examples and supporting details were used to support his/her claims.

Grammar may be improved. Word choice/ vocabulary also impedes the meaning/ content of the essay. 

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

TWN

B1_2

3

3

2

4

4

3

5

6

2

5

25

37

31

The writer was able to state facts, examples, and reasons to support both of his/her main idea.

Word choice/ vocabulary also impedes the meaning/ content of the essay. Some words are Misspelled. Describing word errors

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

CHN

B1_1

8

7

8

8

8

8

4

5

7

6

70

69

69.5

The writer was able to develop his ideas using logical reasoning. Almost grammatically correct.

uses extraneous words in some sentences. overused of prepositions in some sentences.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

KOR

B1_2

4

4

4

4

6

7

5

4

8

7

40

53

46.5

The writer was able to relate examples and supporting details were used to support his/her claims.

Grammar may be improved. Word choice/ vocabulary also impedes the meaning/ content of the essay. 

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

TWN

B1_2

9

2

2

5

8

8

7

7

8

4

45

60

52.5

The writer was able to provide adequate supporting ideas for his claims and each sentence contributes to the main idea with the writer’s examples and stated facts.

The writer’s grammar may be improved. word choice/vocabulary confuses readers. Each sentence starts with expressions that are overly subjective and unnecessary.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

IDN

B1_2

7

4

4

6

7

7

7

4

5

2

60

53

56.5

The writer was able to divide his/her taught providing examples and reasons.

Word choice/ vocabulary also impedes the meaning/ content of the essay. Maybe need to take more initiatives to complete the task.

In college, students want to find something to do new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is parttime job. It is good for students to parttime job because it will the students more experience, students earn money, and they may have opportunities to get job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to parttime jobs because students will get more experience. When students have to the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and boss. They will have more and learn more to live with others in . Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Parttime money for students too. will know the value of money and how hard . From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have parttime job is they might more opportunities work in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, can remember your name and reserve the job . All in all, the students might strongly believe that parttime job is necessary and important parttime job can more experience, make money, and provide more opportunities student.

In college, students want to find something to do to have the new experience and money. There are many ways to find something to do and the best one is part time job. It is good for students to do the part time job because it will make the students get more experiences, students will earn money, and they may have the opportunities to get the job in future. Firstly, it is good for students to do the part time jobs because students will get more experiences. When students have to do the jobs, they will face many situations from consumers and the boss of them. They will have more patients and learn more to live with others in societies. Secondly, students will earn more money while they are learning. Part time job makes money for students too. Student will know the value of money and how hard they find them. From this, they will know how to use money and they will have money if they have to use it. Finally, another reason why it is good for students to have a part time job is they might get more opportunities for their works in future. If students work, they will meet many people. In addition, if the agency finds that this student is good at working, they can remember your name and reserve this student for doing the job when this student graduates. All in all, the students might strongly believe that to do the part time job is necessary and important. Because part time job can give more experiences, make money, and provide more opportunities for student in the future.

KOR

B1_1

1

2

1

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

18

18

18

The attempt to prove the main idea was evident through tangible reasons.

It was difficult to make sense of the text due to the wrong usage of wards and grammatical errors.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

THA

B1_1

5

5

3

5

5

5

6

6

6

5

51

51

51

Use of time as rationalization for the essay's stance is quite novel.

The essay could have been better if the grammatical errors were avoided.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

HKG

B2_0

6

6

5

6

7

7

6

7

5

5

60

60

60

There were elements of logical sequence that allow ease of comprehension.

There were identifiable grammatical errors as well as writing style deviations.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

PAK

B2_0

2

2

2

3

2

2

1

4

1

1

20

20

20

The necessary words to prove the main idea were found from beginning to end.

the text was not very comprehensible. Various errors were visible all throughout the test.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

JPN

A2_0

2

2

1

2

2

2

2

3

2

2

20

20

20

The author seemed to have tried their best in establishing the main idea of the essay.

The text was difficult to understand due to the wrong use of a number of words.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

KOR

B1_1

4

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

39

39

39

Transitional devices were used in the essay, and they improved the flow of thoughts.

Grammar seemed to be problematic that it lessened the ease of understanding the text.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

THA

B1_1

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

2

20

20

20

The intention to prove the main idea was shown through repetition of keywords.

The essay was problematic with respect to grammar and word usage.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

PHL

B2_0

7

7

7

8

8

8

8

8

8

7

76

76

76

The use of complex words was impressive. The essay was comprehensive overall.

The use of second person pronouns could have further encouraged audience participation.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

SIN

B2_0

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

8

8

88

88

88

There was good level of fluency based on the overall production.

The essay could have been better if the text had pronouns apt for audience involvement.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

KOR

B2_0

6

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7

7

7

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6

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62

62

The presentation of ideas were logical as a whole. Ideas were creative.

There were several instances when grammar affected the appeal of the text.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is important for college students to have a job. First, in many ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work easily lead distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only two of three areas good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as workstudy which allow to make a little bit of and sometimes allow to study on the job. I think this is much different from parttime work, in which must focus attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

While a great many of my friends and family think that it is important for college students to have a part-time job or seek some form of supplementary income, I simply do not think it is that important for college students to have a job. First, in many large ways students already have a job. Their job is to be students. Their job is to learn to go to school. They should not be required to work as a kid easily lead a distraction from their studies and have a negative impact on their performance in classes. In college, we always say that you can only pick two of the three areas which are good grades, sleep, and a social life. The fact of the matter is that we are already busy enough learning and making new connections to have extra time to work. That being said, there are opportunities such as work study which allow you to make a little bit of cash and sometimes allow you to study on the job. I think this is much different from part time work, in which you must focus your attention solely on the task at hand and have no room to keep up with schoolwork.

TWN

A2_0

3

3

3

2

3

3

4

2

2

3

25

28

26.5

The text has frequent inclination to concrete and direct convictions of ideas

The essay may have lock supporting details as it has few instances of focus and analysis

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

JPN

B1_1

7

7

6

6

7

8

8

9

9

10

90

77

83.5

The ideas were organized, unique, and contextualized based on writer's situation.

There were grammatical lapses all throughout the essay that affected comprehensibility.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

KOR

A2_0

6

4

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5

8

8

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4

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8

40

62

51

The writer was able to express a variety of unique ideas.

Grammatical errors were observed all throughout the essay. Purpose can be more evident.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

TWN

B1_2

7

6

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8

9

5

5

5

65

66

65.5

The writer was able to express a variety of unique ideas.

The essay did not stick to the purpose and had faulty grammar.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

TWN

A2_0

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7

7

8

7

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5

4

4

45

64

54.5

The ideas were logical and writer showed comprehension of the topic.

The essay lacks a clear direction and overall cohesive structure.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

JPN

B2_0

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9

8

8

8

10

8

10

8

9

85

86

85.5

The essay expressed different ideas fluently, was very organized, and had a clear purpose.

Grammatical errors were observed in some parts of the essay.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

CHN

B1_2

9

8

8

9

9

8

7

5

9

6

80

78

79

The writer gave plenty of examples and defended the claim properly.

The work could still be enhanced in the area of sentence construction.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

JPN

B1_2

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5

2

7

2

1

1

33

34

33.5

The intelligibility is heighted in the text followed by some sophisticated word choices

The tone of the txt is not very clear and may have issues in writer's willingness and involvement

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

IDN

A2_0

8

8

8

8

8

7

9

5

7

6

63

74

68.5

The essay was able to present articulate thoughts and provide novel ideas.

The essay lacks a clear direction and showed few grammatical errors.

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

THA

A2_0

6

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6

55

55

55

The essay contains logical and appropriate organization of ideas and illustrations

The essay has an inconsistent claims and may have made it challenging for readers to grasp the aim of the text

I agree with I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have part-time job to learn how work before employed a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work So we should have . Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard I had part-time job I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments part-time job to many things. As I said we have time in a university we can do something for ourselves by using payments part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after . I agree that is important for college students to have part-time job we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can experiences thanks to part-time job.

I agree with it. I have three reasons to support my answer. Firstly, I think we should have a part-time job to learn how work before employed in a company. We go to a university to learn many things before employed and we have much time to do something after classes. We can choose whether we have a part-time job to learn how work or not. So we should have it. Secondly, I suppose we should know how hard earning is. I had not known that earning money to live is really hard since I have had part-time job. And I could thank my parents. I think it is important for us to know how hard earning and thank parents. Thirdly, we can use payments of part-time job to do many things for experiences. As I said we have much time in a university. And we can do something for ourselves by using payments of part-time job. For example, we can go travel and see the world, buy books, organize a student conference and so on. I think that experiences will help us after graduate. So I agree that is important for college students to have a part-time job. Because we can learn how work, we can know how hard earning is and we can get good experiences thanks to part-time job.

THA

B1_1

7

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75

79

77

Writer was straightforward with the examples and provided rational reasoning.

Be attentive of the punctuations as it impedes context.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

CHN

A2_0

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60

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66.5

Reasoning was rationally supported.

Need to be careful with grammar. Writer deviated from topic.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

TWN

A2_0

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30

27.5

Fluency is almost perfect. No trouble speaking the language.

The writer could use a better conclusion to reconnect with the main topic.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

ENS

ENS

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31

Fluency is almost perfect. No trouble speaking the language.

The writer needs to improve grammar and sentences construction.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

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33

33

Sentences were clear and well worded.

Grammar and vocabulary may be enhanced.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

IDN

B2_0

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51

55.5

Well worded and communicated the claim effectively. Fluency is almost perfect.

Conclusion could be better.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

JPN

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30

27.5

The writer provided good claims and support.

The writer needs to be careful with the use of singular and plural form of words.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

HKG

B2_0

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33

33

33

Sentences were clear and well worded. Fluency is good.

The writer could use a better conclusion to reconnect with the main topic.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

TWN

B2_0

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29

Reasoning were supported by examples.

Essay could have been concluded better.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

THA

B1_2

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5

49

49

49

Plenty of examples and support were provided.

The writer needs to improve grammar and sentences construction.

I agree with the statement. I think two points for . First, a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students and English. I learned many important things or example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have , I would not have any knowledge, and . I think I grew as adult compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance know the importance and value of money. When I received salary made by myself, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to many things my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard make money. Recently, many college students part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. , I think it is important for college students to have part-time job.

I agree with the statement. I think there are two points for the reason I agree. First, to have a part-time job when we are college students can be a preparation for being a member of society. I have had a part-time job for four years. My part-time job is teaching junior high school students Math and English. I learned many important things. For example, how to talk with boss, how to deal with personal information, how to associate with my colleague. If I didn't have it, I would not have any common knowledge, sense and friend. I think I grew as a adult person compared with I was high school student. Second, it is a chance we know the importance and value of money. When I received salary which was made by myself for the first time, I thought that I mustn't waste money. Until I entered college, I used to be bought many things by my parents. It is not too much to say that I didn't know how hard we make money. Recently, many college students had a part-time job. I think they also learn many things like me. So, I think it is important for college students to have a part-time job.

THA

B1_2

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3

3

20

33

26.5

The writer can develop reasoning ideas to support his/her claim.

Ideas were repeating. Grammar should be improved.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

IDN

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3

8

30

39

34.5

The writer was able to develop supporting details for the essay although it was not logical.

The essay should be reorganized and revised because it affects understanding.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

JPN

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3

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3

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4

4

5

35

36

35.5

The developed ideas of the essay were comprehensible. The topic sentence and conclusion make sense.

The supporting details were not so clear and specifically support the topic sentence. Grammar and sentence structure should be improved.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

IDN

B1_2

4

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3

5

4

5

4

3

4

30

38

34

The writer was able to use different reasons to support his/her writing.

Topic sentence was confusing and unclear. No concluding sentence.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

CHN

B2_0

7

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5

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9

50

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54.5

The writer used logical reasonings and transitional words in the essay.

Some ideas were redundant. Grammar and sentence structures should be improved.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

JPN

B1_2

3

3

3

3

3

4

7

5

5

4

30

40

35

The developing ideas were reasonable

Sentence structures and grammar should be improved. Supporting details should be reorganized.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

IDN

B1_1

8

8

6

7

9

7

6

8

4

4

60

67

63.5

Word choices used were appropriated.

Some developed ideas were too far to close to the essay topic. One example used was not relevant.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

THA

B1_2

9

6

8

8

9

10

9

9

7

5

70

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75

The supporting details were logical and well-organized.

Some sentence structures and word choice should be improved. Punctuation marks should be check.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

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The supporting details were reasonable to support the writer’s claim.

Grammar should be checked. The concluding sentence should be improved.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.

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The writer was able to use reasons, examples, and opinions to support his/her claim in the essay.

Sentence structures and grammar should be improved. Word choices were redundant.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends shopping, go to stylish cafe, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and , costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement by myself. nother reason is that we can valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service how difficult to money before we graduate school. I could thank my parents I what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about service be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from parttime job as as class in school. That's why I agree with having a parttime job.

I agree with this statement. In my opinion, there are two big reasons. Firstly, we can get money. College students need a lot of money for many things. For me, it's really important to go out with friends and go shopping, go to stylish café, and drink. I can't survive without money from my part time job. Some people get money from their parents, but I don't want to bother my parents. They already pay for my school and lent, it costs a lot. I think I have to earn money for my amusement fee by myself. And another reason is that we can get valuable experiences. We meet new people and learn about service for customer, how difficult or hard to get money before we graduate school. I could thank to my parents as I knew what to make money and how hard. Also I learned about the service manner. It would be useful when I get a job. Of course studying is the most important things for students, but we won't be able to get this kind of experience in university. I think experiences from part time job is as value as class in school. That's why I agree with having a part time job.